At our school we use the Excellence in Writing Curriculum. I just love this program. So before winter break my students learned how to write a story using what we call a "Story Sequence." To teach them how to write a story we first tell them a traditional story and then guide them into retelling it into their own words. One of my students rewrote it this way and I wanted to share. I was giggling through the whole thing...Enjoy!
Big, Gray Shark
In the fall of 1935 Big Gray Shark was looking for food for his hungry pups. They lived on an extremely, colorful coral reef. For several years, his only friends were Hammer Head and Great White. Big Gray Shark decided to go on a hunting spree.
He wanted to catch a small group of seal to feed his hungry pups. Quickly he rushed to his friend, Hammer Head for some hunting tips. But Hammer Head said in a wicked tone, "Are you talking to me?" He was no help. Next he asked Great White for tips as well, but he wouldn't help either. So Big Gray White decided to hunt on his own. After locating the seals' hangout, he caught three fatty seals. Now he could start setting up the feast.
Finally he finished and the smell of carcass went through the reef. "How are we going to eat all this?" Big Gray Shark thought. Suddenly Hammer Head and Great White appeared ready to eat. But Big Gray Shark told them, "If you helped me, you would have got some." Laziness never pays.
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